Monday, 23 March 2015


On  Monday we went to Motat. At Motat it was very cool the best thing I like about Motat was the maze. When I was in the maze I got lost.The maze has mirrors .When I was walking  in the maze i got hit by one of the mirrors. When I finished going to the maze I went to the old phones.The phone were very dum because I couldn't here anyone.

Criteria for an Effective Paragraph
Par 1
Par 2
Par 3
Par 4
Par 5
⚈ Start with a topic sentence.

⚈ Have at least 2-3 connected sentences.

⚈ Have sentences that are effective that
  1. have varied beginnings

    b.  have juicy vocab e.g action/describing  words

    (c) grammatically correct

  (d) punctuated correctly.

(Think of 1 or 2 things that you need to to focus on next time, to make sure your paragraphs are effective.)
Next time I  need to have varied and juicy vocab

1 comment:

  1. That's great you got your Motat writing published Emmanuel. It is good you have thought about how you could improve your next piece of writing. I look forward to seeing how you go.


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